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lucid Master Cheater
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Posted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 6:47 pm Post subject: I just wrote this on notepad. |
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This land is my grave,
That I will pave
My way through
That's all I can do.
This land is my addiction,
As they lay my conviction,
All I do is stare.
It is all I dare.
I am imprisoned in this land,
By my own hand.
I walk this land,
So simple and bland.
Why fight this war?
There is nothing more
For me to do,
As I go through
This land
I walk by my own hand.
Shigure
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Posted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 7:25 pm Post subject: |
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Nice. I like it
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lucid Master Cheater
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Posted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 7:30 pm Post subject: |
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| Thanks, what do you think it is about?
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Waly Master Cheater
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Posted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 7:33 pm Post subject: |
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| Shigure wrote: | | Thanks, what do you think it is about? |
It makes me think of a soldier, marching down a rainy path, recounting war memories.
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Posted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 7:33 pm Post subject: |
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epic
is it about uhh deat/drugs/hitler/pie/cef?/your insanse love of dark byte?
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Posted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 7:44 pm Post subject: |
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I think its about Gaining/having freedom. Did you have any inspiration when doing this? what was it
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lucid Master Cheater
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Posted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 7:49 pm Post subject: |
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Actually it's about my life.
I will die and I make decisions that shape my life. I cannot escape my life hince addiction. People judge me daily so they convict me constantly and I will not question or fight them. My decisions imprison me into the crowd of everyday life. So why try? I cannot fight it. I will continue to walk the path my life has taken.
Is it easier to understand now?
Not as much of a happy ending, but I am going to write a sequel. And no I didn't really have inspiration other than my life. I just really want to get some things out that I lock away in the vault that is my mind. It is really depressing to have so much hidden from the world.
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Fantasy I post too much
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Posted: Wed Mar 18, 2009 1:50 am Post subject: |
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| If you have a lot on your mind, then writing is an extremely good way to get out with it. Especially if it's "hidden" like this (: Can really help you. And it was well-written. Keep it up.
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lucid Master Cheater
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Posted: Wed Mar 18, 2009 6:27 am Post subject: |
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| Thanks. I just sort of wrote it. I didn't even think about it much. I knew I was going to write a poem, I opened notepad and started. I was going to write about something completely different but it took its own shape. I just kept typing and made that in about a minute.
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Posted: Wed Mar 18, 2009 6:55 am Post subject: |
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This kid wants to write an emo song but he's doing it wrong,
His lines are too short with not enough thought,
Stereotypical rhymes about bullshit times,
So here's a little thought; think about what's good.
Start thinking about what you can do n' not what you should
Open your mind and express how you feel,
Just start writing and create something real.
Brap brap
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[SWED] Faust Ph'nglui mglw'nafh Cthulhu R'lyeh wgah'nagl fhtagn
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Posted: Wed Mar 18, 2009 7:14 am Post subject: |
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My mind is a blank
For insomnia I can thank
No sleep i have had
As I lay, this is bad
I ready your peom here
I felt a slight tear
But this peom did inspire,
My Inner Vampire
Faustus S. Robison, Esquire
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Children Grandmaster Cheater Supreme
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Posted: Wed Mar 18, 2009 8:10 am Post subject: |
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| S3NSA wrote: | This kid wants to write an emo song but he's doing it wrong,
His lines are too short with not enough thought,
Stereotypical rhymes about bullshit times,
So here's a little thought; think about what's good.
Start thinking about what you can do n' not what you should
Open your mind and express how you feel,
Just start writing and create something real.
Brap brap |
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