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You can make any kind of writing you want, like Stories, Poems, Scripts of a play etc. _________________
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hcavolsdsadgadsg I'm a spammer
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| I have the goofiest fucking story I wrote like 4 years ago. Oh god, so uploading it once I find it. |
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I need some feedback on my writing style. Its been two years since Ive written a piece of science fiction. _________________
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Lol saw it. _________________
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Drkgodz Flash moderator
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@TS, your writing style is weird. You're not supposed to make a paragraph describing each character like that... In the story it self, you should describe them. But meh you can write however you want. _________________
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| Drkgodz wrote: | | @TS, your writing style is weird. You're not supposed to make a paragraph describing each character like that... In the story it self, you should describe them. But meh you can write however you want. |
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| Aviar wrote: | | Drkgodz wrote: | | @TS, your writing style is weird. You're not supposed to make a paragraph describing each character like that... In the story it self, you should describe them. But meh you can write however you want. |
Advice on mine pl0x. |
Many grammatical errors.
Some strange sentences that look like they tried too hard for the sake of detail.
| Quote: | | The silent rumbling of the vehicle as it warmed the complex minute internal mechanics which drove the greater whole, the overall purpose. |
Sentence fragments.
Work on flow, it gets choppy as it goes on. |
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Aviar³ Grandmaster Cheater
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| slovach wrote: | | Aviar wrote: | | Drkgodz wrote: | | @TS, your writing style is weird. You're not supposed to make a paragraph describing each character like that... In the story it self, you should describe them. But meh you can write however you want. |
Advice on mine pl0x. |
Many grammatical errors.
Some strange sentences that look like they tried too hard for the sake of detail.
| Quote: | | The silent rumbling of the vehicle as it warmed the complex minute internal mechanics which drove the greater whole, the overall purpose. |
Sentence fragments.
Work on flow, it gets choppy as it goes on. |
I try hard on the detail since I enjoy being able to paint pictures with words (Ill go over what was written later) and Ill have a look at grammar later (friday). _________________
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| Detail is good to have, but overdoing it is possible. You want to keep the pacing and flow, not bog it down with unnecessary fluff. |
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Aviar³ Grandmaster Cheater
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Alright, thanks for the criticism. Ill see what I can remove without damaging the ambience or overall sense of the story. _________________
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halomasterce Master Cheater
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Posted: Thu Sep 04, 2008 9:09 am Post subject: |
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I'm not sure but if you want images in it you can use the tags thatr you might use in HTML
like <img></img>
Or I think he disabled those tags, Iono try
<b><s><u><br><hr><center> and all the tags that doesn't ruin or mess up the story to much are available for you to use
the buttons for Bold Italics and Underline only works in IE right now, not on any other known browsers (tested on FF, doesn't work, Tested on Google Chrome, Doesn't work) _________________
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Imma write a story on this later.
I<3writing humor stories. _________________
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